Tuesday, March 31, 2009

My attempt at the 55 word thingy

She had anyways lost her appetite when he fought with her...
He finished eating and got up, angrily, remarking, "Can't you ever finish eating on time?"
She sighed and bent her head so that he couldn't see her tears and remembered the time when he used to wait till she also finished before getting up.

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She walked into the room with a glass of milk in her hand...
He beamed proudly at his beautiful bride, dreaming about the future and looked forward to the passionate night ahead.
She waited till he fell asleep because of the drug in the milk before stepping out for her night of passion with Jim.

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She walked with sure steps, knowing that she was about to catch him off guard.
She heard voices behind the closed doors, quietly she opened the door and saw him in his favorite position with his boyfriend.
With a flourish she took out the gun, laughing, she shot them both and walked out into the sunlight.

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So, what do you think? Do I pass?!
Be kind and let me know what you think of all 3... :)



16 comments:

Indian Home Maker said...

Loved the first one the best. I liked the unexpected ending in second and third one...
first was sad :(

...but liked all three :)

Swati said...

lovely...second one was thrilling

I attempted as well :)

DewdropDream said...

Certainly! I like all three! :)

Pixie said...

@IHM: Thank you thank you! :)
yea.. first one was sad...

@Swati: Coming over to check now...

@DDD: Thank you! :)

Anonymous said...

your blog is very nice.

i liked the last story the best here.

-vinay

rayshma said...

me like story 2 the best.

Just a grail said...

I loved them all, the first one made me a little weepy I had a marriage like that.

The second one made me wonder why she was leaving if he seemed to love her so much.....

The third one, wow, not what I was expecting!! :-)

Ersa said...

Second one I liked best. But loved the other two too... Awesome !

Solilo said...

Me likes. Me likes. Loved all 3.

Actually each story had a different theme and suspense till the end. You excelled!

Indyeah said...

awesome!You did all three beautifully!I am in awe of all the 55ers:D
everyone is doing them so nicely...

you pass with flying colours!:))

Pixie said...

Thank you! *taking a bow*

This has inspired me to write more 55 liners! :D

Renu said...

Loved the second one m most:)

Anonymous said...

Hey, this is my first visit.. liked the second one..

illusionaire said...

*bows*

Love all three... very difficult to chose my favorite because they are all perfect!

From a personal perspective though, I think I would prefer the first as it touched me the most. Second one is... "ouch, no man wants to face that". And third one is... a wee bit homophobic :)

But nevertheless you pass with flying colors on all counts!!! :)

Smitha said...

Pixie!! All three were fantastic!!! You do more than 'pass'. I think yours are definitely one of the best that I read so far! Way to go!!!

Pixie said...

You guys have been really kind :)
Thank you! :)
Will attempt to write more 55 liners :)