Thursday, August 20, 2009

Playground


She eyed the little kids playing in the playground enviously.
How she wished she could play too! The swings were absolutely thrilling!!
Chotu had said he would push her swing high if she could get to play...
She started off with a spring in her step to play, but then her little heart skipped a beat.
She remembered the last time she had ventured into the playground and how when her mother had found her, she had been whipped.

A tear trickled down her muddy face, remembering the pain and how Chotu had applied the paste on her back to make it stop hurting.

She went back and sat on her box dejectedly, playing with her raggedly doll Simbal. She sat still for almost an hour, peeping out now and then to see the children play.

After a while she heard Chotu call her, she looked up with anticipation in her big brown eyes. Chotu pointed out to the place where her mother lay passed out because of the drugs she took.
She was happy, almost sang in happiness and thanked God for the drugs her mother took.
Now, she could play for as long as she wanted without her mother waking up!

She skipped out with a song in her heart and a tune on her lips to play on the swings and to rush down the slide!!!

21 comments:

Swaram said...

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writerzblock said...

Pixu, that was absolutely beautiful, and heart-wrenching. I feel so sorry for the poor kids. What kind of a mother is she?! *Sniffles*

You write beautifully! Keep at it :-)

Monika said...

sigh i can never come first :(

And now is S by swaram ;)

let me read the post

Smitha said...

You've written it so beautifully! It was heart wrenching..

You write very well! You should do more stories!

nivedithasperceptions said...

Omg that was so depressingly good. And, different people, different perspectives! :)

Swaram said...

Sigh! Pixie, u write so well kano!
U must do more of these. Those emotions r captured so well! Is it inspired by any real life story?

Monika said...

pixie it touched a chord, beautifully written. I have a tear in the corner ready to roll down after I read this.

Awesome I think this is the first fictional piece I am reading here and u write really really well

kanagu said...

Very beautifully written Pixie... :) I loved it... :)
pls write more stories :) its really good :)

wisegirl said...

Why are u writing wierd sad stuff??? Are u ok? I hope u tell me if sth is wrong.....

Pixie said...

@Swaram: LOL!!
this has become your trademark na, come and leave an initial and then walk away!! :D

Is it good? I found it weird and sad when writing it!

Nothing's wrong of course...it's just a weird sad story that was inspired out of nowhere!

Yea, will try and write cheerful stories next! :)

Thanks for the encouragement you guys! You are all so sweet! :) :)

Meira said...

seen from the lil girl's perspective, it sure is a cheerful thing.:P
ok ok...sad logic, that!
Beautiful story

lifeismystery said...

Very Nice Pixie. Sad and Touching..

hitchwriter said...

geeeeez....

i m in awe...

this is wonderfullly written... its agnoising... and uplifting at the same time..

you really write beautifully pixie... it really touched a chord... you shoudl do this more often... :D :D

but on other thoughts... I cant give too many compliments... so ...

claytonia vices said...

hmm... nice and disturbing at the same time...

ani_aset said...

this was saddeningly beautifully written pixie

Renu said...

Life has such contradictions, where one;s poisone becomes another one's pleasure.

indianhomemaker said...

Sad and heartbrealing ... but not unbelievable Pixie :(

Some people should never have kids. And then we have a government that's refusing to allow sex education...

Crafty Shines said...

OMG!!!!

this is lovely..pixu!!!!

*crafty gets into writer mode*

pixu, ur narration was so livid, just right amount of descriptions, and just right amount left to imagination!

u know, its so so difficult to create empathy in readers, let alone do it in concise narration...and this story is exactly that!

and u've fleshed out the characters so simply too!

pixu!!!! must to write more okies????

i loved it! {{{{{{{{{{hugs}}}}}}}}}}}

Ordinary Guy said...

beautiful........... is the one word I have...........

Classic, it is... seriously :P

Titaxy said...

awesome, pix...keep such posts coming, loved it!!!

Deeps said...

that was beautiful,Pixie.so very poignant!

Do keep writing like this :))